Analysis - Leads

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"Nik Wallenda has become the first person to tightrope walk directly over Niagara Falls, crossing through the falls' famous mists and gusts in less than a half hour Friday night while tethered to a wire at the insistence of the network televising the stunt," begins the USA Today report.

Although a bit wordy, this lead clearly defines the what (Niagara Falls crossing,) who (Nik Wallenda,) where (Niagara Falls,) and when (Friday night,) of the story. If I were writing this story, however, I would re-consider using the stunt-man's name in the lead. It is not necessarily recognizable by the general public. The fact that he is in the seventh generation of a family of circus performers and tightrope walkers would mean more to a reader than an unfamiliar name.

Including the last bit, "while tethered to a wire at the insistence of the network televising the stunt," implies a bit of conflict to the otherwise simple story. He attempted the crossing and it went on without a hitch. This was the first time Wallenda has ever used a harness in any of his stunts and only did so because ABC insisted on it. I think this use of "conflict" may be a bit of a reach.

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Nikki:

Good job generally on the blog. Be sure you space out the entries so you're writing bits each day. That will help you form the habit to read news daily.

GG

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