Betty Hutton was an actress and singer in the 1940s and 1950s. She died on Sunday at 86 years old.
New York Times Richard Severo, wrote the obituary as a story-telling piece, using a lot of adjectives. He describes Betty Hutton's and her work as: upbeat, electric, masked, brassy and energetic. He also used clichés such as, "sound like a fire alarm" and "blond bombshell." I think Severo could have written a better obituary without using clichés and over used adjectives. I believe it sounds insulting and shows laziness in the writer.
He then writes about her career chronologically, but in descending order. To start off about her life, the first paragraph quotes Betty, "I tried to kill myself" after recalling her decline after fading from public. This is rude. A writer should not start off by writing about the horrible events that the person went through, at least not as graphic. He ends the obituary commenting on Betty's love life. The first sentence, "She married four times, to Mr. O'curran; Ted Briskin, a manufacturer; Alan Livingston, a recording company executive; and Pete Candoli, a jazz trumpet player.
He finishes off with a stupid quote that is irrelevant or doesn't sum off her whole life, he writes, "My husbands all fell in love with Betty Hutton," Ms. Hutton once said, "None of them fell in love with me." I think this leaves the reader felling sorry for Betty, like she was lonely. I don't think Severo himself knew if Betty was unhappy in her marriages. He needs to be optimistic and believe that Betty, received the fullest self-satisfaction with every marriage, or else he is leading on the reader. Having the obituary's focus on Betty's "Tragedy Hollywood" life is just trashy.
Washington Post Martin Weil writes with the same enthusiasm as Severo. He uses a lot of adjectives: brassy, bouncy, big-voiced, sparkled, shined, blond leading, zest, and hilarious, abounding energy. Weil focuses on Betty's career throughout the whole obit.
When describing her not-so-glamorous life he says, "She began a slow descent into obscurity. At one point, she was described as reclusive and beset with physical, financial and emotional troubles". When writing on Betty's downfall, this is all Weil writes about. I believe this is a generic and respectful way of describing Betty's troubles.
About Betty four marriages, Weil writes that she had four marriages, and that is all.