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February 24, 2007

Mary Tyler Moore House for Sale after Renovation

http://www.startribune.com/417/story/1018551.html

http://wcco.com/local/local_story_033164709.html

The Star Tribune article, “Mary never lived here…but you could for $3.6 million,? tells the story of the Minneapolis couple who bought the Mary Tyler Moore house in Minneapolis’ Kenwood neighborhood. The couple bought the house with the intension to fix it up and resell it, and the article documents in great detail what the couple did to fix the house while referencing how the house was portrayed on the show.

This writer handled the challenge of developing a lead by writing a delayed lead. The writer’s lead says, “Don Gerlach was paging through a newspaper a couple years ago when a postage stamp-sized photo of a house in an ad caught his eye. It read: ‘Queen Anne Victorian. Needs updating.? This is an example of a delayed lead because the writer intentionally buried the lead by beginning with an anecdote to draw the readers in. The fifth paragraph is the nut graph because in this paragraph the writer summarizes the news that the house is up for sale after being renovated for two years, and the mention of the renovation transitions into the rest of the article where the writer discusses all the renovations.

The WCCO article, “Mary Tyler Moore House for Sale,? also discusses the renovations of the house with another type of alternative lead: the question lead. This lead says, “Want to own a piece of Minnesota history? It will just cost you a few million -- $3.62 million to be exact -- for the newly renovated Mary Tyler Moore house.? According to the Fedler book, the question lead is effective if it is brief, simple, specific, provocative, contains less than a dozen words, and the readers will feel compelled to answer it. Therefore, the lead is effective because it is short with 8 words, specific since it asks one simple question, and compelling because most readers would probably be interested in owning something of value, and provocative because it leaves the reader wanting to know more. However, Fedler also says not to ask questions that will turn away readers and since the reader sarcastically says, “It will just cost you a few million- $3.62 to be exact…,? this could turn away readers who may not be interested in reading about a house they know they couldn’t afford.

In my opinion, both the alternative leads were successful for the types of stories the writers were writing. The Star Tribune writer’s delayed lead was effective because the anecdote drew the reader into the article, and starting from the beginning when the couple first found out about the house easily transitioned into discussing the following renovations. I think the WCCO writer’s question lead was effective because it followed the rules of what Fedler describes as an effective question lead. I don’t think the possibility of turning away readers by saying how much money the house is was a problem because the headline blatantly states that the article’s about the Mary Tyler Moore house being for sale and I think many people who are not interested in the house would still be interested to read it since it is a prominent tv house in the local area. Also I think the question lead was effective because the article is a feature and not a hard news story, and it draws the reader into the article.


Prince Harry Going to Iraq

http://www.latimes.com/news/nationworld/world/la-fg-harry23feb23,0,1362774.story?coll=la-home-world

http://www.nytimes.com/2007/02/23/world/europe/23harry.html?ref=europe

The news of Prince Harry and his unit being sent out to fight in Iraq is covered in The Los Angeles Times article, “Britain’s Prince Harry is bound for Iraq.? In addition to describing what the prince will do in the war, the writer discusses the public’s reaction of approval and apprehension in sending the third-in-line to the throne prince to the Iraq war, as well as a history of other royals who have served in wars and a discussion of this war being a different situation than the wars the previous royals were involved in, especially since England just announced that they were withdrawing troops.

This writer handled the challenges of being balanced and including many different viewpoints on the issue because she said that there was, “A mixture of approval and national unease? about the prince going to Iraq. The writer said that there is “appreciation? from some, but there are others who fear future videos of him being kidnapped. The writer gave quotes from the prince describing his desire to go with his unit to the war, a joint statement from the Defense Ministry and the royal family asking for privacy so that his locations are not being widely known, and a statement from the ministry saying that it was military decision and the royal family had been consulted. The writer also included a London defenses studies professor giving his opinion on the prince’s safety, and she also included a reaction from a former boxing champion who was arrested when he protested the decision to the prime minister, Tony Blair. Finally, the writer also included the name of a headline in the Sun newspaper that said, “1,600 out…One in,? to emphasize her statement about the prince being sent out when troops are being withdrawn.

The New York Time article, “Prince Harry, 3rd in Line to Throne, to fight in Iraq,? also covers the same event. This writer was not as in depth in including varied sources and opinions. This writer included the kind of statements from the Defense Ministry giving basic information about his deployment. As for the other sources, the writer was not as specific because he included a noncontroversial statement about the prince’s going to war from an unidentified associate who was quoted by the Press Association, another statement that the prince made about his desire to go to Iraq in The Daily Mail, and information from The Evening Standard saying that special forces would be with him for protection. Unlike the LA Times writer, this writer only said that there are “fears among his official handlers that he would be a ‘bullet magnet’ in Iraq, ? and this writer did not go into any more depth about the different reactions from the public.

In my opinion, the LA Times writer did a better job communicating the news of Prince Harry going to Iraq because she focused on the angle of the safety of the prince and how the public is reacting. The New York Times writer just gave basic information about him going to war, but the LA Times writer encapsulated an interesting angle that is unique to this event, which is whether or not it is safe to send a prince into combat in Iraq of all places. To write about the reactions, the LA Times writer used additional sources besides the Defense Ministry and Prince Harry that included the boxing champion who was protesting against it and the defenses studies professor to include more angles and opinions. The New York Times writer only had the sources of the ministry and the prince, and the writer’s only other sources came from other newspapers and one of the sources was unidentified.

February 23, 2007

Clinton and Obama Face Off

http://www.chicagotribune.com/news/nationworld/chi-0702220169feb22,1,675984.story?page=1&track=rss

http://news.bostonherald.com/politics/view.bg?articleid=184392

The article from The Chicago Tribune, “Clinton, Obama come out swinging: Fundraiser’s barbs spark war of words,? is about the back and forth accusations between rival democratic presidential candidates, senators Hillary Clinton and Barack Obama. The arguments ensued after a Hollywood producer and executive, who gave money to Obama’s campaign, said that Clinton lies with “such ease,? among some other insults to her and Bill Clinton.

These writers underwent the challenge of determining news values for this topic. The writers included the basic news values of timeliness (the producer’s comment was published yesterday, Wednesday, and the verbal spats have been ensuing since), impact (the public needs to be informed on the candidates because they will vote), proximity (U.S. presidential candidates), and conflict (the accusations from each candidate). These writers also applied the prominence news value because they included detailed information about the Hollywood fundraiser and stars. The writers also used the news value subsidies of including an entertainment angle to the story because they focused heavily upon the Hollywood fundraiser, and this entertainment subsidy also includes the unusualness/ novelty subsidy because the entertainment industry is usually not included in political articles.

The AP article, “Obama, Clinton camps accuse each other of nasty campaigning,? also covers the accusations between Clinton and Obama that resulted from the producer’s Clinton insult. This writer also used the same news values of timeliness, impact, proximity, and conflict. However, this writer did not apply the prominence news value of including information on the Hollywood fundraiser or the stars. The writer did not focus on the subsidy of the entertainment aspect nearly as much as the Tribune writer did. This writer only mentioned the Hollywood producer in the lead and in the next paragraph when the writer gave the quote about Clinton and said it resulted in the accusations. Otherwise, the AP writer did not include anything else about the entertainment aspect.

In my opinion, I think that the Tribune writers and the AP writer both communicated the news successfully. I think it was good that the Tribune writers applied the prominence news value because the event did involve the Hollywood producer. I also think including the Hollywood angle added another layer to the article. For example, when the writers said that “The Clinton campaign, perhaps stung by Obama’s successful incursion into Hollywood, which at one time was unchallenged Clinton country…,? it added another interesting angle to perhaps why Clinton was so upset at the producer’s comment. I’m not sure if the producer made the comment at the fundraiser or not, but I think the fundraiser still could have been mentioned because the producer hosted it and it includes some prominence with the stars. However, I think the writers devoted too much space to the stars and this gave more publicity to Obama. The AP writer was successful because he or she did not overemphasize the stars, but a small mention of the Hollywood notoriety could have been good since the story does include some prominence.

February 17, 2007

Passengers Overthrow Hijacker on Air Mauritania

http://www.startribune.com/722/story/1007050.html

http://news.bbc.co.uk/2/hi/africa/6368927.stm

The AP story ran in the Star Tribune entitled, “Fast-thinking pilot fools hijacker with help from passengers,? is about how the pilot and passengers were able to overthrow a hijacker on an Air Mauritania flight by communicating in French- a language the hijacker did not know.

The AP writer had to undergo the challenge of deciding on what style to write the article in. The writer chose the hourglass style because it begins with the essential news that the pilot and passengers successfully overthrew the hijacker because the pilot braked and knocked the hijacker off balance and instructed the passengers how to overthrow the hijacker by speaking in French, a language the hijacker did not know. Then the writer transitions into telling the whole story from the beginning with more detail by giving details on how the hijacking took place, that the hijacker tried to diver the plane to France to get asylum, and step-by-step details of how the passengers overthrew him. Throughout the chronological story, the writer mixed in quotes from the passengers to give the article more color and emotion. The article concluded by saying that about 20 people were “slightly injured? and that the hijacker was arrested when the plane landed.

Another article from BBC News called, “Mauritania pilot outwits hijacker,? also covered the story of the thwarted hijacking. This writer chose to write the article in a stack of blocks format because there are a couple of subheads with their own sections. The lead of the story says the essential information that the pilot braked to knock the hijacker off balance and “tipped off passengers about the plan after realising the hijacker spoke no French…,? and the hijacker was “overpowered after being knocked over…?. This writer did not say in the lead specifically how the passengers overthrew him. The AP writer said in the lead that the passengers “threw boiling water from a coffee maker on the man’s face and chest, then beat him into submission.? Also, the BBC News Writer wrote in the lead that the police are investigating how the man got on the plane with the guns, whereas the AP writer did not even mention this information. The other sections emphasizing the overthrow and the end results did not have quotes from passengers like the AP writer did.

In my opinion, the AP writer relayed the overthrow of the hijacking more successfully because the hourglass form allowed for the writer to tell the most important details right away, and the chronological succession allowed for the writer to tell step-by step exactly how the pilot and passengers worked together to overthrow the hijacker in a dramatic and suspenseful way. However, I think that the writer should have included the important information of the injuries and the hijacker’s arrest in the beginning. There was some conflict between the AP article and The BBC News article though because the AP said there were “slight injuries? and the BBC said there were injuries and “a pregnant woman who was treated for severe shock.? Regardless of to what extent the passengers were injured, if there were many injuries I still think that this should have been in the beginning of the article.

February 16, 2007

Council Member Addresses Controversial Comment

http://www.startribune.com/462/story/1005203.html

http://www.myfoxtwincities.com/myfox/pages/News/Detail?contentId=2399144&version=1&locale=EN-US&layoutCode=TSTY&pageId=3.2.1

The Star Tribune article, “Samuels gets an earful at school he criticized,? is about Council Member Don Samuels’ comment that North High School should be burned down referring to his disappointment in the school’s high percentage of black students failing. The article consisted of Samuels’ explanations and the statements that were made from Samuels and various people at Thursday’s meeting over his comment. The writer also included Samuels’ efforts to improve Minneapolis schools.

Since this article is about Samuels’ controversial comment, the writer underwent the challenge of being balanced and fair in representing both sides of the controversy: Samuels and also the students, teachers, and other community members offended by his comment. The writer included quotes from Samuels’ defending himself and explaining what he meant, and the writer also used quotes from the public whom he offended included a community member, a student, and a teacher. The different statuses of these sources gave the reader more viewpoints from an array of people. Also, the article included sources who are still offended and others who are not. For example, the community member and student are still offended, but the teacher has forgiven Samuels. Also, the writer was fair to Samuels because Samuels’ controversial comment and his explanations were placed right by each other instead of making the reader wait for his explanations.

Another article, “Samuels Under Fire at North High,? from Fox 9 News also covers the meeting held Thursday to address Samuels’ comment. This article only included Samuels’ explanations and did not mention any specific responses from the public. Instead, the writer was vague by simply saying, “Many in the crowd of more than 200 students, parents and community members weren’t quite ready to accept his apology.? Also, the writer neglected to include any mention of people who did accept his apology like the Star Tribune writer did. The writer was also vague by saying that “some of Samuels’ critics wonder where he got his information,? and by not using any actual sources to attribute this statement to. However, this writer, like the Star Tribune writer, was fair to Samuels by placing his explanations right by the comment.

In my opinion, I think that the Star Tribune article communicated the news more successfully because the writer included quotes and opinions from Samuels and people who have and have not accepted his apology. I also did not like that the Fox 9 News did not attribute where the writer got the graduate rates of white and black students from. Also, I did not like that the Fox 9 News writer used the words, “mea culpa,? in the lead because I think that is a very obscure word and the writer could have expressed the same meaning differently.

New Dollar Coins Debut Thursday

http://www.nytimes.com/2007/02/15/business/15dollar.html?pagewanted=1&ei=5087%0A&em&en=fe9841cc92f4b3bb&ex=1171688400

http://www.kansascity.com/mld/kansascity/news/nation/16703287.htm

The New York Times article, “A Push for Dollar Coins, Using Presidential Fervor,? includes numerous aspects on the new one dollar coins. The article mostly gives detailed comparisons of the coin and dollar and the previous public favor of bills instead of coins. The article also covers many aspects of the coins including the presidential design, the promotion of the coins, a detailed account on the process of how they are made, the question over whether or not dollar bills will be eliminated, the public reaction of coins in other countries, information on previous American dollar coins (Susan B. Anthony and Sacagawea), and results from a study that researched the failures of coins.

In order to write this multi-faceted article, the writer had to undergo the challenge of determining news values. The writer focused on the news value of impact by saying that the United States Mint “has been working just as hard to make sure that the new coins don’t end up as just another collector’s item,? and the writer also focused heavily on the issue that the coins could potentially replace the dollar bill. This information made it seem as though the coins are going to be mainstream and affect everyone - not just collectors. The writer also focused on the conflict issue by including the pros and cons of the coins and the bills and by including the results from the study on the failure of the coins. The writer used the value of timelines as well because the story was published today, the same day the coins are being put in circulation. This writer also used the news value of proximity because the coins are being released in the U.S., but the writer also devoted a lot of space in the article to coins in other countries, which decreased the proximity.

An article from the Kansas City Star, “New dollar coin set for its debut,? also covers the topic of the new dollar coins. This writer also applies the timeliness and proximity values. However, this writer seemed to decrease the impact of the new coins because the writer said in the lead that “folks with a yen for special coins can tuck a new version of George Washington…,? and there is a quote saying that “collectors? will love the coins. This information does not affect as many people because the writer makes it seem as though the coins are only for collectors. This writer also did not focus as heavily as the NYT article did on the conflict between the practicalities of the coins versus dollars.

In my opinion, the NYT communicated the news more successfully because the writer chose to focus on the coins as being widely distributed and mainstream, which made the article relevant to more people. The Kansas City Star article, on the other hand, made it seem as though the coins were only for collectors. I also liked that the NYT writer made a thorough comparison on the coins and bills because it helped me to understand and think about the different practicalities of each so I could decide which currency I prefer. However, I did not like that the NYT article devoted so much of the article on the process of making the coins. I didn’t think it was relevant or interesting so I think it should have been eliminated or put at the end of the article.

February 10, 2007

Peacekeepers Fight Gangs in Haiti

http://www.nytimes.com/2007/02/10/world/americas/10haiti.html?pagewanted=2&_r=1&ref=world

http://www.iht.com/articles/ap/2007/02/10/news/CB-GEN-Haiti-UN-Slum-Raid.php

The New York Times article, “U.N. Peacekeepers Fight Gangs in Haiti, One Street at a Time,? is about how the president of Haiti allowed peacekeepers to come in and try to defeat the gangs that have plagued Haiti for years. The article gives an in-depth look at the gang situation, including how the gangs have dominated over recent politicians, the vicious actions of the gang, and different reactions from people on whether or not using the peacekeepers to fight off the gangs is a good idea.

The writer of this article underwent the challenge of deciding on a style to write this in-depth article by writing in the hourglass form. The first three paragraphs give the most newsworthy information of the president deciding to let peacekeepers come to Haiti to rid the people of the gangs. The fourth paragraph begins to tell the situation from the beginning when the U.N. became involved in 2004, and the writer describes the specific acts of the gangs that led to the president making the decision to involve peacekeepers. The story also continues with information about past raids, the gangs’ history, and Haiti’s history. The story concludes with an anecdote to describe the current conditions. The writer also mixes in quotes from different sources to further explain the situation and to give their opinions on whether or not the peacekeepers fighting the gangs is effective.

The International Herald Tribune also covered the same story in the article, “U.N. peacekeepers raid Haitian slum in major operation against gangs.? This writer used the inverted pyramid style to cover the story. The lead states the most important news of the U.N. peacekeepers invading slums in Haiti to fight gangs and two people were injured and one killed. The next paragraph gives additional specific information about the peacekeepers and where in Haiti the fighting is taking place. The rest of the article descends in order of importance, and the writer uses quotes from sources while giving further explanations and background on the situation.

In my opinion, I think that The New York Times did a better job at communicating the situation of the gangs in Haiti because the hourglass format allowed the writer to go more in-depth and to write about the situation in a chronological format. I think the chronological format was effective because it gave readers more of a background so they could understand the situation better since most readers of the Times are probably not very familiar with Haitian news. Also, the narrative parts of the gang’s crimes and the quotes helped the reader imagine and understand the horrors of the gangs and the helplessness of the innocent civilians.

February 9, 2007

Two More Local Children Die From Flu

http://www.startribune.com/462/story/989993.html
http://www.twincities.com/mld/twincities/news/local/16654116.htm

“Flu deaths have parents eyeing the needle,? is an article from the Star Tribune about how there has been an increase in parents getting their children vaccinated from the flu after two more local children have died from the flu in addition to the 8-year-old St. Paul boy last week. The article says that additional staff is being added at flu clinics, and the Children’s Hospitals and Clinics are giving free flu shots on Saturday. The article also provides background information about the flu season, such as the number of flu outbreaks.

The writer of this article underwent the challenge of deciding on a form to write the article in. The writer chose to use the stack of blocks form because the article is divided into three sections. The first section is written in the hourglass form because the writer begins with the newsworthy information of the two children dying from the flu, the news of the free flu shots and increase in staff at clinics, and the news that Minnesota has had many cases of the flu in recent weeks even though the flu season is not any more dangerous than normal. Then the writer goes back to the beginning of the story and continues telling the news of the two children who died in more specific detail followed by more specific information about the current number of flu outbreaks in Minnesota. The other two sections contain additional information about the flu in a narrative style because the writer uses specific families and children to focus on and uses quotes from them.

The Pioneer Press article, “Flu kills two Minnesota children,? also covers the news of the children dying from the flu. However, this writer chose to write the story in an inverted pyramid style. The writer started with the most important news of the children dying, then told the story in a descending order of importance, and concluded with a national statistic for how many children die annually from the flu, which probably could have been cut if there was not enough space.

In my opinion, the Pioneer Press article was more successful in communicating the news because the inverted pyramid style allowed the most important news of the children dying to be first so readers could learn of the deaths right away. Also, I think the hard news format accurately fit the serious news of the deaths of children. The Star Tribune article was colorful with the quote and sources; yet, the anecdotes about the families were not dramatic and did not have any suspense. For example, one anecdote just said the child got the shot and a green lollipop afterwards. Also, since the article was divided into three sections, the writer repeated information about the free flu shots and staff increases. Also, it was not until the very last paragraph that the writer said specifically where the flu shots are being held and the reader could have quit reading long before then.


February 6, 2007

Astronaut Charged with Attempted Murder

http://www.latimes.com/news/la-ex-020607astronaut,0,5354281.story?track=mostviewed-homepage

http://www.nytimes.com/2007/02/06/us/06cnd-astronaut.html

The Los Angeles Times article, “Astronaut to be charged with attempted murder,? reports on the news of the astronaut, Lisa Marie Nowak, who was arrested on a charge of attempted murder after she posted bail Tuesday for her arrest on a charge of kidnapping and various other charges. These arrests stemmed from an incident when she confronted another woman, whom Nowak thought to be a romantic rival for the affections of another astronaut, and police found a knife and garbage bags among other suspicious items.

For this story about an arrest, the writer of this article underwent the challenge of not suggesting that Nowak is being judged before a trial. The writer succeeded by using careful wording that is also specified in the AP stylebook. For example, the writer said that Nowak was “accused of stalking and attacking her rival…?, which is correct because the writer simply stated that she is being accused of the crime and has not yet been formally charged. Also, the writer said that Nowak was “re-arrested on a charge of first degree attempted murder,? which is also correct because the writer said “on a charge of.? If the writer had said, “arrested for murder,? that would have been implying guilt. The writer also attributed these charges to court officials, which made it clear to readers that these charges were verified. However, the writer said that Nowak carried the knife, garbage bags, and other suspicious items without any attribution. However, these items may have been listed in the police report and would then not need any attribution.

However, in The New York Times article, “Astronaut Charged With Attempted Kidnapping,? the writer did attribute the police as the source who said that these items belonged to Nowak. This writer was also careful to not place judgment on Nowak before the trial. For example, the writer said that Nowak was “arrested on attempted kidnapping and other charges,? instead of saying she was “arrested for kidnapping and other charges.? Also, both articles attributed the circumstances of the confrontation that led to the arrests to the police or the police affidavit.

In my opinion, both articles were successful because the writers did not place judgment before the trial by including the words, “on a charge of? and “accused of?. However, I think the Los Angeles Times writer should have used the police to attribute that the items did belong to Nowak. It may have been in the police report, but the writer attributed other basic information to the police so I think the writer would have been clearer and more careful if he also attributed the statement about the items.

February 2, 2007

U.N. Report Issues Global Warming Findings

http://www.usatoday.com/weather/climate/2007-02-02-climatechange_x.htm?POE=NEWISVA

http://www.sfgate.com/cgi-bin/article.cgi?f=/n/a/2007/02/01/international/i192609S66.DTL
The USA Today article, “Global warming probably caused by human activity, U.N. report says,? is about the United Nations Report issued Friday that announced humans are most likely the cause for global warming, and that conditions would persist despite efforts to reduce greenhouse gas emissions. The article stated information that was disclosed in the report, including the news that the increases in air and ocean temperatures, melting of ice and snow, and rising sea levels are evidence that the climate is warming, and that floods, droughts, and hurricanes are caused by greenhouse gas emissions.
The writers of this article handled the challenges of using quotes and attributing in an article about the controversial issue of global warming because the writers attributed the findings and opinions to the scientists and politicians so that the reader would know that the writers are not stating their own opinions. The writers reported the controversial and opinionated statements by using many direct quotes. For example, the writers used a direct quote from John Kerry to state the opinionated and controversial statement, “Although President Bush just noticed that the earth is heating up, the American public, every reputable scientist and other world leaders have long recognized that global warming is real and it's serious,? in order to clarify to readers that is not their opinion.
The San Francisco Chronicle also wrote about the U.N. Report on global warming in the article, “Warming ‘Likely’ Man-Made, Unstoppable.? This writer also used many direct and indirect quotes and attributed the findings and opinions to the sources. However, this writer said, “…That was the strongest conclusion to date, making it nearly impossible to say natural forces are to blame,? without any clear attribution.
In my opinion, since the San Francisco Chronicle writer did not attribute this statement, it seemed that the writer was making his own assumptions. The writer could have communicated better if he had found a source to attribute this statement. However, I think this article succeeded in using more quotes from Bush’s administration to balance both sides better than the USA Today article did because the USA Today writer mostly used statements from those who strongly believe in global warming.

Flu clinic opens as a result of boy's death

http://www.startribune.com/462/story/975934.html
http://www.twincities.com/mld/twincities/news/16602249.htm
The Star Tribune article, “After boy’s flu death, calls flood into doctors’ offices,? is about how dozens of phone calls regarding the death of an 8-year-old St. Paul boy from the flu caused the St. Paul Children’s Hospital to hold a special one-day flu clinic on Saturday. The article gave background information on the circumstances of the death of the boy and information about the flu season.
The writer handled the challenge of using quotes by including both indirect and direct quotes. The writer paraphrased statements that consisted of the statistics of the number and types of people who die from the flu each year, information that is on public record like the details of the boy’s memorial service, and verifiable facts like when the flu season starts and ends. The writer also included many direct quotes from a pediatric nurse practitioner and an epidemiologist from the Health Department to emphasize and attribute their expert opinions and precautions.
The Pioneer Press article, “Flu shot clinic scheduled after boy dies,? also tells the story of the flu clinic being held on Saturday as a result of the many phone calls clinics have received concerning the death of the 8-year-old. This writer handled the challenge of using quotes by using indirect and direct quotes. The writer, like the Star Tribune writer, used paraphrasing to state statistics regarding the flu and verifiable facts that could be easily paraphrased like the statements about the clinic opening due to dozens of phone calls. This writer also used a partial quote to cite the word, “widespread,? to cite the precise level of flu activity in Minnesota, and the Star Tribune did not use any partial quotes. I noticed that this writer also attributed the statement about the boy dying from pneumonia Wednesday to a director at the Minnesota Department of Health, whereas the Star Tribune writer did not attribute the same event.
In my opinion, both the Pioneer Press and the Star Tribune writers succeeded in communicating well by using direct, indirect, and partial quotes appropriately. I think the Pioneer Press article was more careful though because they seemed to attribute more than the Star Tribune. For example, the Pioneer Press attributed the cause of death to the source from the Health Department, but I think that would be public record so the attribution probably was not essential. However, the writer was being more careful in attribution. I think the Pioneer Press writer also communicated well because she included the supplemental information of the flu symptoms and preventions and attributed it.

Biden's Controversial Comment

http://www.nytimes.com/2007/02/01/us/politics/01biden.html?_r=1&ref=us&oref=slogin

http://www.chicagotribune.com/news/nationworld/chi-0702010205feb01,1,2450042.story?coll=chi-news-hed

The New York Times article, “Biden Unwraps ’08 Bid With an Oops!,? discusses the controversy over Senator Joseph R. Biden’s remarks about Senator Barack Obama that many have deemed racist and offensive. The article also discusses previous blunders in Biden’s political career, Biden’s attempts to clarify his intentions by going on “The Daily Show? and apologizing to Obama and others, and the reactions of Obama and other African American politicians.
The writer of this article had many good quotes, including many partial quotes that were appropriate because they captured specific words that were colorful such as the partial quote, “blabbering bluster.? However, some of the statements were controversial, assumptions, or opinions and should have been attributed. For example, the statement that said Biden is, “known in Washington for his long-winded ways and his love of the microphone and the spotlight…?, and the statement that said he, “did something entirely out of character: He announced he was done talking,? may not be everyone’s opinion. Thus, the writer could have found someone to attribute these remarks.
An article from the Chicago Tribune called, “Biden tosses hat in ring, puts foot in mouth,? handled the challenge of attributing in a more appropriate manner because there were no controversial statements that went without attribution. This article also handled partial quotes well by placing quotes around unique phrases like, “lightning in a bottle.? Many of the same direct quotes were quoted in the same way in both articles, but I thought it was interesting that the quote when Biden quoted a saying of his mother’s was placed in single quotes in the Chicago Tribune article, and the New York Times writer used a colon to introduce the saying and did not put single quotes around the saying.
In my opinion, the Chicago Tribune article would have been more effective if it focused on the news of Biden’s controversial remark about Obama instead of delving too much into his policy on the Iraq war and the personal story about his wife and daughter dying in a car accident when he was 29. This story was obviously very sad, but it seemed out of place, and since the writer chose to end the article with this I almost forgot that the article was about Biden’s comment. I liked the New York Times article because it used descriptive words like “wounded? and “squak.? However, I did not know why the writer referred to the people in the story as “Mr.? instead of referring to the people by their last names like most articles do.