Sheriff's Aide Being Investigated By FBI
Mark Naylon, an aide for Ramsey County Sheriff Bob Fletcher, is being investigated by the FBI on allegations of stealing money, tampering with evidence, and helping suspects and informants. Fletcher is sticking by Naylon, calling him a good friend and an asset to the department.
The challenge with this story is that it is almost a non-story. My summary is pretty much all that they know, because the investigation just started, and won't be discussed. They also had a challenge in making in balanced because Naylon was unavailable for comment and his lawyer also made no comment.
To make this long enough to be a full article, both papers did background digging on Naylon. Paul McEnroe, Mary Lynn Smith and Howie Padilla, the reporters for the Star Tribune wrote of his background and his history in the city. They talked of his business ventures and also discussed some unflattering comments made by police--interfering with investigations. This information was clear and easy to follow, and with an exception to the last part, wasn't too controversial or damning.
Mara H. Gottfried of the Pioneer Press took a different approach in the background information. She discussed a specific case that occurred in 2003. This introduced new people to the story and seemed a little confusing to me. It didn't seem to fit and I wasn't sure exactly why I was reading it.
I thought that the Star Tribune did a better job in giving me relevant background information, and facing the challenge of turning a one-line story into a full article.