This is a huge improvement from last critique. this is much more readable and the pain chart is tied with your injuries really well. Before it seemed like the pain chart box was out of place, but this updated version is easily readable and I understand the correlation of pain to what the injury was. (reminds me of the heat machine that you can tell the hottest part of the body) but the title makes it clear your talking about pain, not heat. I like the handmade symbols you used as well.
Just an idea, to make the pain chart and front body work even better together maybe make the pain chart just the outline of the person? and not the full skeletal version of the person? It's up to you, I do like it though!
Hey, I really like how you went with the more realistic human anatomy approach to display all of your injuries. The color use for the pain scale is very nice as well, but I would maybe try testing other ways of showing what you injured on the body silhouette. I feel the images could get a little crowded, but I like the direction you chose to take your piece.
like what some of them said i really like the new pain chart... i also like how you combined both of the images from last critique into one image...and you have done it with unity and the only thing i could see you adding would be a title of what the chart is and what it is about. other than that great job!
Quite an improvement! I think you're almost there. I can't really say anything negative about it because its really understandable. However, are you going to label the little black symbols at the bottom? It's obvious what all of them represent except for the triangle...I don't know what kind of injury that represents.
This design is so much better, definitely my favorite out of all that you have done for this project, huge improvement. I think when this is done it's going to look very professional. The colors seem to be working really well together. It is a very easy diagram to understand. Although I am still not understanding what is going on at the bottom of the page with the symbols, But I understand you are still working on it.
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This page contains a single entry by dollo043 published on October 19, 2009 11:55 AM.
This is a huge improvement from last critique. this is much more readable and the pain chart is tied with your injuries really well. Before it seemed like the pain chart box was out of place, but this updated version is easily readable and I understand the correlation of pain to what the injury was. (reminds me of the heat machine that you can tell the hottest part of the body) but the title makes it clear your talking about pain, not heat. I like the handmade symbols you used as well.
Just an idea, to make the pain chart and front body work even better together maybe make the pain chart just the outline of the person? and not the full skeletal version of the person? It's up to you, I do like it though!
Hey, I really like how you went with the more realistic human anatomy approach to display all of your injuries. The color use for the pain scale is very nice as well, but I would maybe try testing other ways of showing what you injured on the body silhouette. I feel the images could get a little crowded, but I like the direction you chose to take your piece.
like what some of them said i really like the new pain chart... i also like how you combined both of the images from last critique into one image...and you have done it with unity and the only thing i could see you adding would be a title of what the chart is and what it is about. other than that great job!
Quite an improvement! I think you're almost there. I can't really say anything negative about it because its really understandable. However, are you going to label the little black symbols at the bottom? It's obvious what all of them represent except for the triangle...I don't know what kind of injury that represents.
This design is so much better, definitely my favorite out of all that you have done for this project, huge improvement. I think when this is done it's going to look very professional. The colors seem to be working really well together. It is a very easy diagram to understand. Although I am still not understanding what is going on at the bottom of the page with the symbols, But I understand you are still working on it.