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Analysis: The AP's story: "Schoolgirl Shot by the Taliban Is Progressing"

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The lead for the AP's article "Schoolgirl Shot by the Taliban is Progressing" is
"A Pakistani schoolgirl who was shot in the head by the Taliban is in stable condition after undergoing two successful operations to reconstruct her skull and restore her hearing, the British hospital treating her said Sunday."

The lead for this hard-news article provides the essential "who, what, when, and where" facts. It efficiently summarizes the story, while still leaving plenty of room for elaboration and detail in the following paragraphs.

The article is a follow-up story, and the phrase "a Pakistani schoolgirl who was shot in the head..." is probably very familiar to regular newsreaders. Readers may not, however, know her well enough to recognize and associate her name with the story, so it was wise of the author to leave her name out of the lead.

The lead does a nice job of both generalizing the success of the surgery, and giving detail ("reconstruct her skull and restore her hearing"). The detail doesn't weigh down the lead or make it wordy.
Finally, the lead cleanly incorporates the "where" and "when" information. Specifying that the hospital is British tells the reader both where she is recovering and who provided the information.

The lead reflects the timeliness (the story was issued today), prominence (she has become a well-known figure in the news, particularly because of her role in advocating for Pakistani girls' education), and interest-level (it is a follow-up story; people want to know what happened to her), of the story.

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