For story structure analysis the Team Hallett blog will look the Associated Press' report on the shooting in San Leandro.
The first thing that is noticeable about how the writer arranges this story is that they choose to add more information to the lead, rather than uses the second paragraph as nutgraph or refresh of the lead. Its especially odd considering the added information, the time of the shooting, is seemingly periphereal and unnecessary.
The writer uses the third paragraph to address the three deaths again and does well by using the sam paragraph to transition into the stories main voice, one of the victim's fathers.
You could this story have been ordered differently?
The answer is yes. Even though it is a professionally written story by the AP, as we learned in class even AP stories can be reworked to still fit a proper news story format. This stems from the idea that each paragraph in a news story is a fact block which are to be arranged in order of importance. Sometimes the importance of certain facts can be argued, and thus comes the possible realignment of certain story segments.