Analysis: Dorothy's dress from 'The Wizard of Oz' finds new home

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The CNN article "Dorothy's dress from 'The Wizard of Oz' finds new home" lacks quotes and attribution that could have made the story more powerful.

The article starts off with a catchy introduction and lead: "It might be Oz, Kansas or simply somewhere over the rainbow. While the destination may not be known, there's no doubt the blue gingham dress wore by Judy Garland, as Dorothy in "The Wizard of Oz," has a new home." However, the rest of the paragraphs seem to fizzle after story's beginning.

The author does a good job of grabbing the reader's attention but doesn't include some important details that would help keeping the reader's attention. For instance, the article really only had one attribution and that was Julien's Auctions, which was only attributed once when talking about the price paid for Garland's dress.

This article could have been powerful and influential to its audiences if the author had attributed and included some quotes from those in attendance of the auction. It would have been fascinating to hear from people who were at the auction and got to see the items for sale, specifically the Garland dress.

I think it would have also been beneficial to the story for the author to describe in detail the dress. The story just briefly describes the dress as "the blue gingham dress word by Judy Garland, as Dorothy in "The Wizard of Oz." I believe it would have been a good idea to give a brief background on the the dress and its appearance to give the reader's a quick refresher of the importance of the dress.

Overall, I think the article would've been a more influential and exciting story to read if there had been attributions and quotes incorporated into it.

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