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In the ABC News article "Missing Nevada Woman Paula Lane Survived on Snow, Tomatoes for Six Days," the author includes some important attributions, but fails to include the attributions that the readers want.

The article is about Paula Lane; the Nevada woman who was stranded for nearly a week in a snowstorm, only to be found nearly a week later by her brother. Lane's boyfriend, Roderick Clifton died during his search for help. The article does a great job of including quotes from Linda Hathaway, Lane's older sister, but it she is the only family member attributed in the story.

Although the quotes from Hathaway are very important to the article, the story could have been more powerful with something from Lane's brother.

In fact, Lane's brother's name is not even included in the article. In other words, the story kind of leaves its readers with numerous questions and few answers. The article also does this by not including many details about Clifton or his family.

Overall, attributing Hathaway made the article more powerful and intriguing to its readers, but it could've been a better developed story with additional attributions from Lane's brother or another family member.

In the StarTribune article, "Question haunts Little Falls: What led shooter to kill?," numerous great quotes are used from the suspect's brother.

The article creates a powerful story that leaves the reader wanting more through it's great use of attributions and quotations from Bruce Smith, the brother of Byron Smith, the man who admitted to killing two teen cousins who broke into his home in Little Falls.

Because of the disturbing nature of this story, it's inevitable that people have numerous questions about Byron and why it took extreme measures to stop the two cousins who allegedly broke into his home, Nicholas Brady, 17, and Haile Kifer, 18. This StarTribune article answers some of those questions that readers may have through quotes from Bruce.

For example, Bruce gives further insight into Byron's life and possible reasoning behind what he did. Bruce suggests the possible reasoning behind why Byron found it necessary to shoot the teens multiple times: "Byron Smith is 5-foot-10 and 190 pounds, but at 64 may have been no match for the athletic 17-year old Brady, Bruce Smith said. Brady had been involved in wrestling, taekwondo, strength and fitness training, his obituary says," the StarTribune article reported.

Quotes like these help readers understand the complex story a little better. It is also more reassuring to the audience to know that this information is coming from a reliable source who obviously knows the suspect very well since they're brothers. I think it was very smart to write this StarTribune article using quotes primarily from Bruce.

Overall, the attributing Byron's brother makes the article much more credible, which makes for a well-written, intriguing story.

The Los Angeles Times' article, "Deputy at Texas Pileup: 'Children bleeding... cars on top of cars,'" uses a lot of good direct quotes that make for a great story.

The article does a great job of using direct quotes from Texas deputy sheriff Rod Carroll who was at the scene of the collision.

The article is a combination of facts and details about the accident and quotes from Carroll. This makes the story more powerful because not only does it provide concrete information, but it also gives a witness's first-hand account of the experience.

For instance, in the story it quotes Carroll saying "I saw people lying on the ground covered by a blanket, being attended to by strangers. I saw an infant being loaded into an ambulance. I saw children bleeding," he told The Times. "It was like a Third World scene, honestly. I just kept walking down that highway, trying to help in any way I could, not knowing what I would encounter next, what would come out of the fog."

Quotes like these grab the reader's attention and really put an emphasis on the seriousness of the event.

Overall, this article does a great job of applying quotations from Carroll to make not only an interesting and good story, but a story that also provides the reader with crucial information.

In the CNN article, "4 dead after train hits truck during Texas parade saluting U.S. troops," the author does a good job of including many important and crucial details.

The article includes a lot of specific details about the time of the crash and those who were killed or injured: "The incident happened around 4:30 p.m. Thursday, during the "Hunt for Heroes" event in Midland." This statement supplies the reader with substantial information regarding the event.

The article also provides its readers with the names, titles, and ages of all of those who died in the crash. The author does a good job of describing the event in chronological order, which makes it easier for the audience to follow. For instance, the article flows nicely in the paragraphs describing the incident: "First responders found two dead at the scene, while two others were later pronounced dead at Midland Memorial Hospital."

In addition to the article efficiently relaying the events of the crash, it also attributes all the important details. For example, the author had a quote from a parade attendee: "I'm waving at these guys and then you...find out this happened." Having quotes from various sources such as a parade attendee make the article more powerful and meaningful; it's a good way to grab the reader's attention.

Overall, the article contains a lot of great information with plenty of details; it relays a strong story with it's frequent use of attributions from various sources.

The CNN article "Dorothy's dress from 'The Wizard of Oz' finds new home" lacks quotes and attribution that could have made the story more powerful.

The article starts off with a catchy introduction and lead: "It might be Oz, Kansas or simply somewhere over the rainbow. While the destination may not be known, there's no doubt the blue gingham dress wore by Judy Garland, as Dorothy in "The Wizard of Oz," has a new home." However, the rest of the paragraphs seem to fizzle after story's beginning.

The author does a good job of grabbing the reader's attention but doesn't include some important details that would help keeping the reader's attention. For instance, the article really only had one attribution and that was Julien's Auctions, which was only attributed once when talking about the price paid for Garland's dress.

This article could have been powerful and influential to its audiences if the author had attributed and included some quotes from those in attendance of the auction. It would have been fascinating to hear from people who were at the auction and got to see the items for sale, specifically the Garland dress.

I think it would have also been beneficial to the story for the author to describe in detail the dress. The story just briefly describes the dress as "the blue gingham dress word by Judy Garland, as Dorothy in "The Wizard of Oz." I believe it would have been a good idea to give a brief background on the the dress and its appearance to give the reader's a quick refresher of the importance of the dress.

Overall, I think the article would've been a more influential and exciting story to read if there had been attributions and quotes incorporated into it.

In the article "American Student Accused of Stabbing Friend 25 Times in Rome" from ABC News, the author does a good job of using attributions and answering the questions that readers would want to know.

Just in the first few paragraphs, the author successfully identifies everyone involved in the incident along with specific details. For example, his lead reads as "A U.S. student studying abroad has been arrested for attempted murder for allegedly stabbing his friend 25 times after a drug-fueled night out in Rome on Halloween," ABC News reported. This lead specifies how many times the victim was stabbed, which isn't necessarily essential to the story, but it makes it much more shocking and intriguing to readers.

The author also identifies the age and name of the victim and the friend being charged with attempted murder. He identifies the victim as 19-year-old Fabio Malpeso and his friend as 20-year-old Reid Alexander Schepis.To me, this makes the story more relatable. I also think it helps audiences identify more with the situation.

Another great thing I thought the author did in this article was include a lot of important attributions. For example, he has quotes from Schepis' attorney, Vincenzo Comi: "Every time that his friend was named, Reid became profoundly upset and cried while apologizing for what he had done," the author reported in his ABC News article. This quote gives the reader a look into what's going on with Schepis and how he's reacting to this whole situation.

In general, I thought the author did a great job of including a substantial amount of important attributions and supplying the reader with intriguing details in this ABC News' article.

Analysis: Man Appears at His Own Funeral in Brazil

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In the article "Man Appears at His Own Funeral in Brazil" from ABC News a lot of great attributions and quotes are used.

The author of this article really utilizes the quotes obtained to add more intensity to the story. For example, more power is added to the story through the use of a quote from Maria Menezes, an attendee of Araujo's wake and a family friend: "some people fainted and others were so scared they ran away. It was a big shock." The way the author uses this quote makes the story that much more shocking.

The author also uses a wide variety of attributions and quotations. For instance, there are numerous people quoted in the article. The author attributes Araujo's mother and sister-in-law and a police officer from the case. By attributing a wide variety of people, the author providers the readers with a more realistic and closer view of the article. It's a good way to make the readers feel more connected to the story and the people involved.

Since the article primarily consisted of attributions and quotations, I felt the author did a good job of covering the various views of those involved in the story. The only thing that I felt was missing from the article was a direct quote from Araujo, the man who appeared at his own funeral. I'm sure many readers are wondering what Araujo has to say about the situation. I think it would have made the story more powerful if the author had include a quote from Araujo and what his reaction was when he found out his family was having a funeral for him.

Overall, I felt the author of this article did a great job of attributing and using quotes to make the story have more of an impact on its audience.

In the article, "Australian zoo keeper crushed by elephant 'stable'," by Yahoo! News the author does a good job of using attribution and quotes to make the story more meaningful.

For example, the author uses quotes from the zoo's director throughout the article. The author gets a quote from the director discussing the condition of Lucy Melo, the zookeeper who was crushed by the elephant: "We're all relieved to hear Lucy's condition remains stable and we're continuing to provide support for her family and her fellow keepers, while we continue our programs for the whole herd," the zoo's director said in the Yahoo! News article.

I think that by using these types of quotes in the article the author is able to establish a better connection with the readers because it's providing the readers with what they want to know and answering some of their questions. The readers want to know how Melo is doing, and they also want to know what's happening at the zoo since her accident. Therefore, I felt that the author was able to create a more meaningful article by including quotes from the director of the zoo where the incident happened.

Although the author did do a great job of establishing a relationship with the readers through the use of quotes from the zoo's director, I felt that more attributions could've been used in the article. For example, it would've been more effective to hear from Melo's colleagues regarding the incident or, in general, Melo as a person. I think this would have given the reader's more of an insight into who Melo is and what could have possibly led to this accident. I also think that providing the reader's with more personal information it tunes into their emotional side and makes them want to stay updated on the story.

Overall, I felt the author of the article did a good job of utilizing quotes from the zoo's director, but the story could have used more attributions.

Analysis: 4th Meningitis Case Confirmed in Minnesota

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In the article, "4th Meningitis Case Confirmed in Minnesota," from MyFox9, the author emphasizes the affects of a nationwide outbreak of meningitis.

The author organized the story into several short, small paragraphs containing important information on the impact that the meningitis outbreak has had on Minnesotans. It appears as though the author relied on three sources for the story. The first source the author uses is in the article is Dr. John Jernigan, "a medical epidemiologist at the CDC leading the clinical investigation team for the outbreak response." He uses Jernigan as a source for information about meningitis as a fungus and an infection.

The Second source that the author cites is actually Fox9 News. This source was used when the author talked about how Fox9 News interviewed the family of a woman who is waiting to find out if she has meningitis, but has already filed a federal lawsuit over the issue. The third source that the author used wasn't directly cited in the article, however, under the article in italics it says, "Information from the Associated Press was used in this report." Therefore, the author also got some information for the story from the Associated Press.

I felt like the author's use of sources were more scattered than clustered, however, the author neither included a lot of sources nor attributions in the article. I felt like the article was pretty short, so the author didn't necessarily need to use a lot of sources. Nonetheless, I think that had the author chosen to use more sources and maybe include some direct quotes then the article would have been a little more influential and effective to the readers.

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