Staff Sgt. John Daniel Shannon has spent nearly three years at the Walter Reed Army Medical Center after an AK-47 round shattered one eye and half of his skull. Now, fully healed Shannon is back at Walter Reed because of paperwork that was filed incorrectly.
Last week it was discovered the doctor's signature on two forms had been written too late and the forms had expired. Shannon was forced to be reexamined and his medical summaries had to be rewritten. Now no one can tell him when he will be able to return to his family.
This was only the most recent of many hurdles Shannon has had to overcome. While at Walter Reed, Shannon has had six different case managers. His latest disability case manager, Sgt. First Class Aleen Domingo, called Shannon in August to tell him one document was missing Shannon's signature and that he'd fax it to him. The fax never made it to Shannon and Domingo was unreachable having retired himself.
Shannon has said he would like to take over his case managers job to make sure all the other hospitalized soldiers get the treatment they deserve.
Apologies, Anger at Walter Reed Hearing
"After nearly three years as an outpatient at Walter Reed Army Medical, Staff Sgt. John Daniel Shannon had begun the wrenching process of turning himself into a civilian"
This is a direct lead that does a pretty good job luring the reader into the story. It adequately covers four of the six questions. Who, Shannon; What, turning himself back into a civilian; When, after nearly three years; and Where, Walter Reed.
The lead gives the main story points while eliminating details that are given in the later parts of the story. The lead is also not too long as it is close to the 25 word norm, exceeding it by only a few.